reflection letter

Dear Mrs. Magz,

            My biggest challenge this year with creative writing  was to re-construct when I put all my sentences together in paragraphs. My oraganization was my biggest problem most likely. I learned how to construct my writing in order instead of jump around. What I learned about myself was that if I put my full effort into my work I can be a great writer instead of a bullshit one.

            I relized that im picking bigger words that I have never used before in my writings instead of boreing ones. My attitude has change to being more positive because all the work shops we have had, classmates actually say that some of it is actually good. I always thought to myself that my writing was complete crap. My favorite aspect about this class is that mostly all the people in this class will give you honest and good feedback. My least favorite aspect about this class is that as a class we don’t get to decide what were going to read. I learned organization in my work shops. Easier to notice mistakes or to replace words to make a sentence flow has improved to me.

            I continue this to grow as a writer and reader by using all the things I have learned into future essays. I will take my time to make sure my sentences and work structure works with my writings. I used organization and  work structure in my 3 writings I chose.

            I am most proud of how much I have grown as a reader and a writer. I actually feel like i'm an adult writing instead of a second grader. I can still work on how my vocabulary so i can use different words instead of repeating.
           These last 18 weeks i have learned so much about writing. It's nice to be creative with my writing inatead of being so plain and feel like your repeating the same words over and over again. This wil really help on my future essays i will have to do in college and life. I am really thankful Mrs. Magz.



                                                                               Sincerley, Dion Ball

 

            

summer dream revised

    One breezy summer day at Folsom lake, Dion Ball and Cody Cova were having a wonderful time tossing the Frisbee around until we were tired in the gusty wind. Then we would go to take a dip in the water to cool off. The water was a little cold but felt good to get cooled down. After a bit, we get out of the water to dry off with these downy scented towells. "Dion it's time to try it again," said Cody with determination. Cody Cody's dream was to always hit the baseball across the lake. I always knew that Cody loved baseball,but his task was almost impossible. If he did this it would be like winning the lottery to him. I told Cody, "If you believe in yourself anything is possible." I pitch one to Cody and smacks the ball so hard it flew on the other side of the lake. For a second i thought i saw a glimpse of the next Barry bonds. Cody was jumping in the air with excitment. His smile was just priceless. He suceeded his dream.

depression revised

Depression is my obsession revised

Dion Ball
P.4


    Depression is one emotional word that carries a humans feeling throughout the way they act. It's amazing of how much it can change a person’s life. In my life, it comes up when it has to deal with my mom, sister, girls, and religion. I don’t know what to really do at this point. Help me

     Girls are one of the main reasons why my emotion is like this. I am so confused of what I actually do wrong. It's a giant build up of questions that I don't know and questions that sike me out. Am I attractive? Do I fall for a girl to quick? Is my personality and actions ruin my chances with every girl I meet? Is my patience to short to find the one? The list can go on and on. I can never get a real answer because I'm getting opinions. Ever since Mrs. Magz, Tyler Crawford, Kyle, and my family tell me there advise with care, I have felt that I have changed deeply. What can I do to change this illness? Help me.

     My family that I treat with no respect gets to me so easily. My mom still gets me what ever I want even though I have a job. I will constantly argue with her over the most ridiculous things. She is trying to teach me a valuable lesson right now, " Positive things happen to positive people." My sister that is raising a family with two kids takes me anywhere I please. I always leave the car with out saying thank you. I need to take action and not run all over my sister and use her for stupid things. Such as, going to dance clubs, football games, gym, ECT. What can I do to stop this from occurring? Help me.

     My relationship with god is even drifting away in front of my eyes. I always blame him for my losses and ask him why did you take my dad away from me at the age of 3? Why are my relationships with girls and family terrible? I lost avid the one thing that mattered to me. My young life leader Nyk has been helping me the most and told me the greatest piece of knowledge I learned. "God has a plan for you". I believe and trust this statement one hundred percent. Does god believe me when I say this? I hope he forgives me for acting dumb. Help me.

       " Depression is my obsession. Lost and found being tossed around. My heart is breaking... every beat it's aching. Tired of getting hurt every time... I wish and pray you will be mine. Trust me I'm the one... let's go have some fun. I'm so confused as we speak; I'm drowning in this murky creek. Thinking of what I did... realizing I'm just a kid... I'll be waiting for you...I love you..."- Dion Ball