reflection letter

Dear Mrs. Magz,

            My biggest challenge this year with creative writing  was to re-construct when I put all my sentences together in paragraphs. My oraganization was my biggest problem most likely. I learned how to construct my writing in order instead of jump around. What I learned about myself was that if I put my full effort into my work I can be a great writer instead of a bullshit one.

            I relized that im picking bigger words that I have never used before in my writings instead of boreing ones. My attitude has change to being more positive because all the work shops we have had, classmates actually say that some of it is actually good. I always thought to myself that my writing was complete crap. My favorite aspect about this class is that mostly all the people in this class will give you honest and good feedback. My least favorite aspect about this class is that as a class we don’t get to decide what were going to read. I learned organization in my work shops. Easier to notice mistakes or to replace words to make a sentence flow has improved to me.

            I continue this to grow as a writer and reader by using all the things I have learned into future essays. I will take my time to make sure my sentences and work structure works with my writings. I used organization and  work structure in my 3 writings I chose.

            I am most proud of how much I have grown as a reader and a writer. I actually feel like i'm an adult writing instead of a second grader. I can still work on how my vocabulary so i can use different words instead of repeating.
           These last 18 weeks i have learned so much about writing. It's nice to be creative with my writing inatead of being so plain and feel like your repeating the same words over and over again. This wil really help on my future essays i will have to do in college and life. I am really thankful Mrs. Magz.



                                                                               Sincerley, Dion Ball

 

            

summer dream revised

    One breezy summer day at Folsom lake, Dion Ball and Cody Cova were having a wonderful time tossing the Frisbee around until we were tired in the gusty wind. Then we would go to take a dip in the water to cool off. The water was a little cold but felt good to get cooled down. After a bit, we get out of the water to dry off with these downy scented towells. "Dion it's time to try it again," said Cody with determination. Cody Cody's dream was to always hit the baseball across the lake. I always knew that Cody loved baseball,but his task was almost impossible. If he did this it would be like winning the lottery to him. I told Cody, "If you believe in yourself anything is possible." I pitch one to Cody and smacks the ball so hard it flew on the other side of the lake. For a second i thought i saw a glimpse of the next Barry bonds. Cody was jumping in the air with excitment. His smile was just priceless. He suceeded his dream.

depression revised

Depression is my obsession revised

Dion Ball
P.4


    Depression is one emotional word that carries a humans feeling throughout the way they act. It's amazing of how much it can change a person’s life. In my life, it comes up when it has to deal with my mom, sister, girls, and religion. I don’t know what to really do at this point. Help me

     Girls are one of the main reasons why my emotion is like this. I am so confused of what I actually do wrong. It's a giant build up of questions that I don't know and questions that sike me out. Am I attractive? Do I fall for a girl to quick? Is my personality and actions ruin my chances with every girl I meet? Is my patience to short to find the one? The list can go on and on. I can never get a real answer because I'm getting opinions. Ever since Mrs. Magz, Tyler Crawford, Kyle, and my family tell me there advise with care, I have felt that I have changed deeply. What can I do to change this illness? Help me.

     My family that I treat with no respect gets to me so easily. My mom still gets me what ever I want even though I have a job. I will constantly argue with her over the most ridiculous things. She is trying to teach me a valuable lesson right now, " Positive things happen to positive people." My sister that is raising a family with two kids takes me anywhere I please. I always leave the car with out saying thank you. I need to take action and not run all over my sister and use her for stupid things. Such as, going to dance clubs, football games, gym, ECT. What can I do to stop this from occurring? Help me.

     My relationship with god is even drifting away in front of my eyes. I always blame him for my losses and ask him why did you take my dad away from me at the age of 3? Why are my relationships with girls and family terrible? I lost avid the one thing that mattered to me. My young life leader Nyk has been helping me the most and told me the greatest piece of knowledge I learned. "God has a plan for you". I believe and trust this statement one hundred percent. Does god believe me when I say this? I hope he forgives me for acting dumb. Help me.

       " Depression is my obsession. Lost and found being tossed around. My heart is breaking... every beat it's aching. Tired of getting hurt every time... I wish and pray you will be mine. Trust me I'm the one... let's go have some fun. I'm so confused as we speak; I'm drowning in this murky creek. Thinking of what I did... realizing I'm just a kid... I'll be waiting for you...I love you..."- Dion Ball

creation

     Dion's creation can begin really at any part of his seventeen years of his life. His creation is broken up into different parts such as, personality, apperence, hobbies, and actions. these are all started from some point in his family.
     His personality he gets straight from his mom. Dion has that arguementive side until he proves himself right or a point. his mom does the same exact thing so most the time they never stop bickering at each other until they feel like they won the fight.
    Appearence is from Dion's cousins. He's always liked to dress nice. His cousins always have too. The brands we wear is obey, Diamond, and Lrg. he feels like them and himself is fasion in a big statement. They believe if they have a better chance to get a girl. It's created him to become a nicley dressed man.
    hobies he gets from cousins as well because they play sports not competitivley play video games, and gym. Dion loves playing football with his family. he also goes to the gym everyday to get huge like a body builder. This has created Dion for what he does usally on a daily basis.
     Actions he gets from everyone in his family. His foul mouth he gets from his mom by talking bad in front of people. By cursing and useing terrible language. His hyper and energetic he gets from his sister always being active and waiting to do to keep them entertained and occupied. His maturity is getting much better but needs much work still.
    His creation as a person has grown over the few years. His, apperence,hobbies,personality, and actions. His mature level is going up as we speak, he's done talking about the little kid jokes that are foolish and disgusting. Hobbies grow as his cousins do it seem like. creation is who you are.

Smart Nino

 This young intelligent boy named Nino was only 9 years old when he first solved the Rubik’s cube. He did it in an outstanding time 8.14 seconds.

            He grew up in the small town Citrus heights, CA. It was gorgeous and a nice place to live as if it were Disneyland. The bright and colorful flowers that surrounded him made him flare his nostrils and inhale the clean fresh smell.

            Anyways, Nino was always the top kid in his class since 1^st grade at Trajan Elemtary. Even though majority of the time hen sleeps in his class every single day. His fellow classmates were amazed of how nino was able to sleep but still get a perfect score on all tests in every subject. His talent and skill he has to be able to do this on a daily basis is incredible.  

            A kid in his class named Cody cova was always behind Nino in every subject. Cody would study day in and day out to just keep up with this super human Nino. Cody questions himself, “Does Nino have magic powers?” with a lisped. Cody wants to be able to be smarter than Nino. He has been craving this since 1^st grade.  A star test is coming up that proves all the knowledge an average 10 year old would know. Cody knew that this would be his only shot to prove to everyone that Cody is smarter than Nino.

            The last week Mr.cova has been studying for hours and hours every day. His brain was going to explode of how much knowledge that he is forcing into his beautiful Goldie locks head. Nino was not intimidated about this. Nino said to Cody, “you’re a chump Mr. Cova.”

            Today is the day of the day of the exam. Cody was sweating so bad looked as if he has been in a steam room for hours. Nino was chuckling the whole time saying his geeky lines. At the end of the day both tests were super close and the winner is…. It’s a tie!

            You know what that means we have to settle this inn a tiebreaker match. Who will win?

nothing

     There are a many of things i do when i do nothing. I really think about my whole life or play some Call of duty. These two things can keep me from doing nothing for hours or even sometimes days.
     Yesterday was November 8th, 2011. I remember standing in the blistering cold waiting and waiting for the greatest game in the world, Call of Duty Modern Warfare 3. I remember doing the same thing last year for COD black ops. It was the same but much more colder. Plus i was sitting next to this guy named chance. i sat with him last year as well.
     Me and Chance are having are talk about how COD modern warfare 3 is going to be so much better than all the other Call of Duty's combined. "Dion dont you agree each year Call of duty has improved in every aspect as a game?," said chance. I said with no doubt, "acourse i do." Trying so hard not to think about the time so the time will fly by. But the fact that's it's freezing outside doesn't help at all. Cold to where we could see are breath.
     I also think a lot because i like to see how my life has been and how i can  improve it. I just think why god took away him from me? He was my dad, the guy i always would have looked up to. Well i wouldn't really know since i was only 3 and don't remember anything about him. I think why do i always make stupid mistakes in my life? I hate how i know that i treat my family like crap and get attached to girls too quick.
     yeah, yeah that's what i do when i do nothing.

summer dream

One breezy summer day at beautiful Folsom lake. Dion ball and Cody cova were having a wonderful time tossing the Frisbee around until we were tired. then we would go to take a dip in the water to cool off. we get out of the water, dry off with these downy scented towells. Cody's dream was to always hit the baseball across the lake. I always knew that Cody loved baseball,but his task was almost impossible. I told Cody, "If you believe in yourself anything is possible." I pitch one to Cody and smacks the ball so hard it flew on the other side of the lake. For a second i thought i saw a glimpse of the next Barry bonds. He suceeded his dream. I knew i had faith in him. "I did it Dion!"